This was my original task:

One-page paper 1: Response to Sontag’s The Decay of Cinema

Your task is to take Sontag’s text as a point of departure and do two moves to it:

1) do some research and read through at least a few of the numerous responses (both academic and non-academic) to her text and identify topics and phenomena which these texts propose as an extension of Sontag’s perspective; we are not interested in proving the author right or wrong, but in finding out how the authors you will choose to read perceive cinephilia, fandom, or the general love for film and/or tv;

2) think of yourself in relation to Sontag’s text: how does the description of film-watching relate to your own experience? What level of significance to you ascribe to it (why/why not?)? What, again in terms of your lives, could you identify as an affective experience that allows you a space to drown your mind into? How does this relate (or not) to watching moving images?

Your response should not exceed one page (Times New Roman 10, single-spaced). Remember to APA your sources. Please upload your texts here and bring them printed on Thursday.

I finished that however, it needs some corrections ( document is uploaded below)
My teacher commented this: in your text, you have used a few expressions I need you to develop on for clarity: para. 1: the manipulation of the modernity the classics of the past para.2 the basic expectation of cinemas para.3 an extension of the normalcy “emotion, imagination, and tradition” – how did they manifest in the past (examples?), and what makes you think they no longer do in the present (examples)?? can you back up the claim about the internet’s gobbling up (and not, for instance, extending) the role most of the films have become predictable, normalized, and … lifeless: I would drop the “most” quantifier since proving it would require a global reach – but even then, that’s a super wide claim – what makes you think so? you included Sontag’s quote where she writes about “standards” – what are they? how do you know that “the emotions…” have no major consideration? where do you notice this? you name-dropped Black Panther as an exception: could you develop on that? how is technology more superficial now than it was decades ago? what’s changed? you didn’t include any sources commenting on/arguing with Sontag (1996)

I need you to fix those mistakes in my text. Shouldnt take that long as the main part has been written